Hey, quite a few tense changes here. I’m not sure if the bit with Aramana is deliberately past-tense? Typically you write in the present tense but a lot of this chapter is slipping into past tense.
She needs to release he pain and grief for all that she went through. But then she needs to become angry enough to want prevent it from happening to others. She has been blessed and chosen, she has the power and Thane is her strength, together they can make change happen.
Hey, quite a few tense changes here. I’m not sure if the bit with Aramana is deliberately past-tense? Typically you write in the present tense but a lot of this chapter is slipping into past tense.
Also: “keep you safe and you pups safe.” your*
Hope this helps xx
She needs to release he pain and grief for all that she went through. But then she needs to become angry enough to want prevent it from happening to others. She has been blessed and chosen, she has the power and Thane is her strength, together they can make change happen.